QUIET LIFE

 Nowadays, with technology development We tend to be around it all the time and never take a break. If we work, the computer is a fundamental tool, if we are children, the play statiton, mobile phone games and the apps as youtube and tiktok are one of the most common ways of entretaiment. Doesn´t it make you feel anxious? Sometimes, Wouldn´t you like to eliminate technology?

First of all, imagine that you sell your phone, computer and television, life could be quieter, isn´t it? We wouldn´t be consuming short videos, or listening the bad news on television, It could be peaceful. However, what happend if I want to talk with someone who is far away? or I need an ambulance, what if I am looking foward some specific information or I just wish to listen to music while cooking. As you see, eliminating technology would be challenging and in my point view it would end unsuccesful.

Therefore, the most intelligent thing that we can do is embrace technology and use it with moderation, learn to enjoy our free time without electronic devices, and find a balance because in this modern society We are driven to use it and as this tool exist, we must learn how apply it to our lives.

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✅ Corrected Text:

Nowadays, with the development of technology, we tend to be surrounded by it all the time and rarely take a break. If we work, the computer is a fundamental tool. If we are children, the PlayStation, mobile games, and apps like YouTube and TikTok are some of the most common forms of entertainment. Doesn’t it make you feel anxious sometimes? Wouldn’t you like to eliminate technology now and then?

First of all, imagine that you sell your phone, computer, and television—life could be quieter, couldn’t it? We wouldn’t be consuming short videos or listening to bad news on TV. It might feel peaceful. However, what happens if I want to talk to someone far away? Or I need an ambulance? What if I’m looking for specific information or just want to listen to music while cooking? As you can see, eliminating technology would be challenging, and in my view, it would ultimately fail.

Therefore, the smartest thing we can do is embrace technology and use it in moderation. We should learn to enjoy our free time without electronic devices and find a balance. In modern society, we are driven to use technology, and since this tool exists, we must learn how to apply it wisely in our lives.

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📊 Estimated CEFR Level: B1–B2

Your original text shows a solid intermediate level (B1), moving toward upper-intermediate (B2). Here's a quick breakdown:

• Strengths:

  • Good structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.

  • Relevant vocabulary: “moderation,” “entertainment,” “development.”

  • Clear argumentative tone.

• Areas to improve:

  • Grammar (verb tenses, question tags).

  • Word choice (“entretaiment” → “entertainment”; “apps as” → “apps like”).

  • Punctuation and article use (e.g., “the PlayStation,” “the bad news”).

  • Sentence fluidity: making sure connectors like “however” or “as you see” fit naturally.